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Modern buildings change the character and appearance of towns and cities. The government should insist that new buildings be built in traditional styles to protect cultural identity. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Modern
buildings
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 have become increasingly prevalent in recent years, and they are thought to influence the appearance of towns and cities. I support the idea that governments should introduce architectural guidelines to preserve cultural
heritage
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 and the traditional
identity
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 of urban areas. Traditional
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 reflect a nation’s
identity
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, as they often
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 its history, values, and unique architectural style.
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buildings
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 not only demonstrate the richness of a country’s architecture
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 but
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 tell stories of important historical events.
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, Khiva – an ancient city of Uzbekistan – is home to many traditional
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, each of which reflects a unique part of the nation’s cultural and historical
heritage
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. The patterns and textures on the walls illustrate the craftsmanship
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 achievements of past generations, which gives a deep sense of pride to every Uzbek.
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, preserving and promoting traditional architecture helps future generations stay connected to their
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 and national
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. 
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, introducing architectural regulations that protect cultural facades can play a vital role in boosting tourism. Most tourists are drawn to the historical charm and traditional beauty of a country, which are often reflected in its architecture.
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, if traditional Uzbek minarets were replaced by modern glass towers, or a glass office complex took the place of Japanese teahouses, the result would be visually unappealing. Tourists can already see
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 contemporary
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 in cities across the globe.
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, countries
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 as Uzbekistan, Italy, and France, which heavily depend on tourism, should implement architectural policies to preserve traditional
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 and maintain cultural authenticity.   In conclusion, I agree that governments should introduce certain regulations requiring construction companies to follow strict traditional design principles in new construction.
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 will not only help preserve a nation’s cultural
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 but
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 continue to attract tourists from around the world.

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