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In some countries, many more people are choosing to live alone nowadays than in the past. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

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These days, most people prefer to live alone rather than living with their parents or partners. I believe
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 has some positive and negative aspects. Living alone has some advantages for young adults. In some countries, most young people are willing to leave their parents’ home after finding a job in order to become independent.
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 leads them to be more responsible.
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, they will learn how to manage their budget not only to cover all expenses but
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 to save some money monthly.
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, they have to do household chores on their own like cooking, ironing, shopping and so on.
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, living alone has some drawbacks. It causes some individuals to feel depressed and isolated. Since , there is no one to socialize
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 communicate, as well as, there are some moments in
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 life in which he needs to have a conversation and talking about their daily stressors with
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 face to face.
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, if you watch some events like football matches or music competitions on television with you
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 to share your emotions and idea, it would be more joyful.
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, when
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 lives without any roommates or friends, he should pay all costs by himself and without sharing with
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 ,including bills, accommodation and groceries.
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, it is unlikely to have enough money to spend going on holiday. To sum up, in my opinion, living alone has both benefits and drawbacks for people ,and
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 is different from person to person. Individuals should decide
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