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Nowadays, the way many people interact with each other has changed because of technology. In what ways has technology affected the type of relationships people make? Has this become a positive or negative development?

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It is true that due to technological improvement,
people
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 have changed their way of interacting with others.
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Technology
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 gathers
people
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 around the world, and it is beneficial for
people
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 in exploring different things. On the one hand, I believe it is
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technology
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a technology
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 that brings
people
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 closer without national borders. Apply to the educational field,
people
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 nowadays are using online meeting websites to participate in
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instead
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 of taking face-to-face
courses
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.
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 situation makes Taiwanese students easier to take
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 that are delivered by
a
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prestigious
institution
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 in other
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,
such
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 as Harvard. As for entertainment purposes,
people
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 can choose to join online concerts that are held in other
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 by using their phones, and they don’t even have to fly to other places.
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, thanks to
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technology
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,
people
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 can use social media platforms to make friends with
people
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 from different
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.
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, I would argue that it has become a positive trend for
people
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 to have better chances of experiencing fascinating things.
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, students have more opportunities to take part in various
courses
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 they enjoyed, and it may help improve their learning conditions.
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, students who have difficulties studying abroad have a chance to take open
courses
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 online without any tuition fee.
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, fans could see their idols clearly on the screen, and they don’t have to go to the concert in person.
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,
people
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 can know foreigners in foreign
countries
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 and interact with each other through the Internet. In conclusion,
technology
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 brings
people
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 from different parts of the world closer in education, entertainment, and society, and I believe
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 a positive development in exploring many kinds of interesting things.

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