Some people think technology development decreases crime, while others believe it actually encourages crimes. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Some people consider that
technology
has been used by criminals to break laws others think
otherwise
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essay will look into both facets of
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subject and I would argue that
technology
is to blame for the raised crime rate. Advanced
technology
can help the
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authorities
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information of the members of the community. Nowadays, people live in the era of big data.To put in
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, information
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individuals,
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living address, the occupation, the
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status and so on, is recorded in a big database, which law enforcement agencies have access to.
For example
, the police officer can search for an offender's profile to support an investigation rather than go to the field to gather information manually.
This
is beneficial to track down the criminal and crack a criminal case in a comparatively cost-efficient way.
Consequently
, it has a positive impact on social safety.
On the other hand
, there are
also
loopholes in
technology
systems that could be used by convicts to commit felonies. Bullying
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not only
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in real life in the modern world; Cyber-bullying has
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to
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existence.
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documentaries reported a cyber-crime on telegram in Korea. A group
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by a man
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himself as a "professor" ganged upon female victims including teenage girls to get their nude photos to be sold online for illicit money. The group was brought
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justice in the end but cases like
this
still are going on in the world due to its
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convenience
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convenience
without enough lawful supervision.
This
leads to an increase in the crime rate. In a nutshell,
technology
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convenience
of the
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social safety to some extent.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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