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It is not neccessary to travel to other places to learn the culture of other people. We can just learn much from books, films and the internet . Do you agree or disagree ?

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Travelling has been more accessible than ever before with airfare costing less than 20 years ago.
People
 will argue that to
experience
 a different
culture
, travelling will not be needed due to the internet and other material. I strongly disagree with that idea. With technological advancements now,
people
 can gather information easily with the internet. They can watch youtube videos and read digital articles regarding a country's
culture
 and tradition.
For example
, some documentaries show full details on some of the customs of tribes and festivals. Learning about
culture
 can't just be on textbooks and videos. Those methods can only show the basic information whereas
first
-hand
experience
 is key to experiencing another country's
culture
. For
instant
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,
people
 in Japan are serious when preparing food which is why their food
culture
 is considered the best in the world
People
 can't
experience
 the taste and how the food is prepared unless they are there.
Moreover
, weather, clothing, texture and language cannot be experienced just in books.
For example
, Asian countries have a long history when it comes to traditional clothing and language, it is
also
 considered that Chinese is older than English.
In addition
 to my example, feeling some of the texture of traditional clothing
people
 wear in Korea as to customs and activities
people
 do when it snows.
In addition
, learning the language and the history is best when talking to a native speaker. In conclusion, in order to get the best
experience
about
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 a
culture
 is to have an actual connection and
this
 is only done by travelling to those destinations and seeing them
first
-hand.
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