Some children spend hours every day on their smart phones. Why is this the case? Do you think thi is a positive or a negative development?
The more developed the technology, the more terrible impacts on the
peoples’
daily lives. Especially, some Change noun form
people’s
children
spend most of time
using their Correct pronoun usage
their time
smartphones
.
To begin
with
the fact that nowadays only learning is significantly popular for several cases Add a comma
,with
such
as covid19, military coup and traffic jam. Some parents are not patient enough to be stuck in the
traffic jam when they take their Correct article usage
apply
children
to school. Moreover
, they claim that this
is one of the ways to waste their children
precious Change noun form
children's
time
. Children
are forced to learn their lessons on
online by their parents because they have no Change preposition
apply
chances
to study in the classroom. Fix the agreement mistake
chance
Subsequently
, their eyes are always on the screen of their smartphones
. If there is no physical exercise, it will be awful
impact on their health. After that, Add an article
the awful
an awful
Children
cannot have the skills which
all Correct word choice
that
the
Correct article usage
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teenagers
should have such
as the
communication skill, the participating in physical activities.
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Secondly
, teenagers
spend their leisure time
using smartphones
with their own chocies
. They have been addicted to using Correct your spelling
choices
smartphones
because there are many applications that can attract their attention such
as games, you tube
, Correct your spelling
youtube
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Twitter
twitter
. Correct word choice
and twitter
Although
playing game
all the Fix the agreement mistake
games
time
are
too Change the verb form
is
monotous
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monotonous
to
play, Fix the infinitive
apply
teenagers
are still obsessed with playing Add an article
the game
a game
game
. Even though Fix the agreement mistake
games
this
is the free time
that can do other activities such
as cycling, swimming and running, they believe that smartphone is the only way to use free
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the free
time
usefully.
In conclusion, from my point of view, this
case is obviously the
negative development not only in Correct article usage
a
teenagers
but also
in adults for the reasons that I mentioned above.Submitted by tr.zarwaihnin on
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