Some people believe that social media sites, such as Facebook or Twitter, have a negative impact on young people and their ability to form personal relationships. Others believe that these sites bring people together in a beneficial way.

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Over the
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two decades, digitalization has increased enormously. It is commonly believed that social media
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as Facebook, Twitter, YouTube and
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have a bad effect on teenagers while others believed that these websites increase community relationships.
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, in my point of view, digital sites have a negative impact on
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academic
acadamic
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academic
and family relationships. To commence with, young people are being addicted to social community apps to know the
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, celebrities, and political news.
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, apps are being used by holding the mobile phones
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long hours.
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, it causes
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health problems
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as obesity, hand pains, and headache. One clear example is that, youngsters are wasting their time
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those
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news
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they are
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procrastinating
their academics
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it leads to strain and health issues.
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to
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, family relationships are being broken by over usage of mobile. Because
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nowadays most of the younger
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are communicating
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friends and relatives through WhatsApp and skype
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they are missing face-to-face communications.
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, these days, teenagers are not spending time with their parents and
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siblings
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they are
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affections
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from their peered ones.
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,
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crimes are being done by young adults due to the stress.
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, opponents opine that these sites build communication around the world. Even though it has
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but
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it has many drawbacks. In conclusion, social sites are impacting
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academics, health and bonds.
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, parents should supervise their children to overcome these issues.
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