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More and more people are choosing to eat healthy food and exercise regularly. Why? What can we do to encourage this?

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These days, healthy foodstuffs, along with physical activities are gaining more concern among the public thanks to the development of media and
technology
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. The essay will present some possible reasons behind
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 issue as well as possible ways to promote it.
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 with, there are two reasons why
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 cult has gone viral.
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, media is the key factor behind that. In fact, information expansion of life-enhancing on websites, TV or newspaper has placed a great emphasis on health issues, which contributes to popularizing clean, nutritious flora and fauna and
sports
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. Without publishing, citizens are still indifferent to those things.
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, the growth of
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 and infrastructure has offered more opportunities to purchase.
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, the appearance of supermarkets has made foods become available since vegetables, fish, pork, poultry is stored longer and fresher. It is
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 notable that if it hadn't been for advanced equipment in gyms or
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 centres, people find it challenging to reach a well-balanced body.
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, there are two ways to inspire human beings.
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, governments are thought to take responsibility for that cult. Having said that, the more modern
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 is, the higher prices are, thereby discouraging citizens from affording these sources.
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, it is significant for authorities to enact some policies which could modulate and balance the market price so that the low-income families would have a chance to purchase.
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, governments had better allocate more funding to free
sports
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 in order to attract people to spend their time working out. In conclusion, I strongly believe that media and
technology
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 are two vital reasons to boost individuals' demands on opting for nutritious foodstuffs and doing
sports
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. It is generally believed that governments should take the cost of those things into consideration, aiming at offering greater access to walks of life.
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