Your local council is considering closing a sports and leisure centre that it runs, in order to save money. Write a letter to the local council.In your letter • give details of how you and your friends or family use the centre • explain why the sports and leisure Centre is important for the local community • describe the possible effects on local people if the centre closes
Dear Sir,
I am quite disgruntled after reading the notice related to the closedown of Anytime Fitness Club. My friends and I visit the club every day either for the gym or to play on the basketball court.
Furthermore
, I even come to the library occasionally to complete my assignments because it offers me a peaceful environment.
However
, this
club play a vital role in the lives of all community members because I saw various old people walking on the race track during the evening. Furthermore
, there are various other sports as well that teenager do very interestingly during the afternoon to relax their mind. Moreover
, the ladies of the town come here to discuss their important or not-so-important issues during their leisure time.
This
leisure centre is relentlessly necessary for all age groups. If it closes down, it would have disruptive repercussions on the physical health as well as
mental health of humans. Furthermore
, learners who use the library would face trouble finding another peaceful place. Therefore
, we do not want it to shut down.
I hope you take my view into consideration.
Yours sincerely,
Navneet Kaur.Submitted by ss6802125 on
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Task Response
Consider providing more specific examples or details to further illustrate the importance of the centre to the community. This will strengthen your argument and make your letter more persuasive.
Coherence and Cohesion
While your paragraphs are generally well-organized, try to ensure that each paragraph focuses on a single idea. For instance, discussing both the club's facilities and the community's activities in separate paragraphs might improve clarity.
Greeting and Closing
The greeting and closing of the letter are well-executed, following the appropriate formal tone required for such a letter.
Suitable Writing Tone
The tone of the letter is suitable for the context, maintaining formality and respect throughout.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite