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Should private schools receive government funding? Give reasons for your answer, and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience

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Education is fundamental to development and growth. Nowadays, it is argued whether funds for development and other facilities should be provided to Private Schools or not. I will be presenting my views in favour that Funds should be allocated and sharing the reasons behind
this
.
Firstly
, I believe that due to privatisation the teachers put more effort into their methodology due to which they innovate the way to describe a topic.
For example
, the Presidency School in Ajmer is one of the prestigious academies, it is not due to the big names associated with the school, but due to the practical way of learning and smaller class sizes for better results. Here, the State ministry should induce funds to promote
such
 practices.
Secondly
, not all the private academies are backed by varied resources like business funding, etc, few are NGO based which are run by part-time teachers with minimal facilities so as to support the poor who cannot even make it to Government Schools. Here, authorities should facilitate those academies to help the poor.
For example
, NGO ‘Goonj’ has
such
 a kind of initiative where teachers from other schools work part-time to teach the kids during evenings and weekends.
Furthermore
, these kids are provided with books, copies and other stationaries from other organizations to continue their education. I believe authority has to take some initiatives to support these kinds of developments. Concluding the above, Private institution
also
 need proper support to run their operations as thrive for innovations and make sure that the poor should get the same level of education as others do. All in all, these small initiatives from the ministry would help to create a strong pillar for Society.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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