The restoration of old buildings in major cities throughout the world involves enormous expenditure. This money would bring more benefits if it was used to provide new housing and road development. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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There are two different arguments about the existence or non-existence of the museum or art

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in current form or virtually shapes. I completely agree with

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idea which, prefer real museums

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of virtually forms. In

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essay, I will compare both views and mention my point of view and

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conclude. Nowadays, with the development of virtual space and equipped with modern facilities

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as advanced cameras

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supplying real space with 3D technology. Some people think we do not need real museums or other art

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. They claim can watch those

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with 3D technology.

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, recently, I have watched Golestan palace online, I can change all images and rooms

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can rotate the camera and watch other

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even could zoom in and watched the environment more accurately. The fans of

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an idea believe that visiting in absentia cause, those

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keep better

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do not spend any cost for renovation.

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, some people think that real visiting and become familiar with that environment closely,

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, watching all details

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as colour, material, furniture and even their smell can transmit all feel to us.

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, if I want to compare that virtual visit with a real visitation at the Niyavaran palace, I gain a sense of enjoyment and pride,

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, I remember all details well. In conclusion, I completely agree with real visitation because we can touch on historical events and all customs which are relevant to ancient. And the more important thing is we can feel past atmosphere even their activities.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 8.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.5

Complete response

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Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

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4 paragraphs

262 words

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