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WEALTHY NATIONS SHOULD ASSIST POORER COUNTRIES WITH HUMANITARIAN RELIEF DURING NATURAL DISASTERS. DO YOU AGREE OR DISAGREE?

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IT IS ARGUED THAT RICH COUNTRIES SHOULD HELP UNWEALTHY
NATIONS
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 WITH HUMANITARIAN RELIEF DURING NATURAL CALAMITIES.
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 ESSAY AGREES WITH
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 STATEMENT BECAUSE THEY HAVE A MORAL OBLIGATION TO DO SO AND THEY CAN AFFORD TO DO IT. THE RICH STATES HAVE THE MORAL RESPONSIBILITY DURING THESE UNFORTUNATE EVENTS AND ACCIDENTS TO LEND THEIR HANDS TO THESE UNDERPRIVILEGED
NATIONS
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.IT IS CONSIDERED AS THE RIGHT THING TO HELP THOSE WHO ARE IN NEED ACROSS THE
WORLD
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 OF HUMANITY.THESE GROUPS CAN REALLY MAKE THESE CALLS DURING THOSE DIFFICULT TIMES AND MAKE AN IMPACT ON THOSE LIVES.THE FOUNDATION OF INTERNATIONAL ORGANISATIONS LIKE THE UNITED
NATIONS
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,THE RED CROSS, AND THE
WORLD
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 HEALTH ORGANISATION ARE INTENDED TO MANAGE THAT SITUATION EFFECTIVELY WITH MULTIPLE-LEVEL COORDINATION FOR A BETTER
WORLD
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. THE WEALTHIER COUNTRIES HAVE ENOUGH FINANCIAL RESOURCES , WHICH THEY CAN AFFORD TO DONATE TO THOSE NEEDY
NATIONS
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.THEY HAVE ENOUGH LEFT IN THEIR NATIONAL TREASURES FOR THE DECADES TO COME AND THE LATEST KNOWLEDGE ABOUT EFFECTIVE WAYS OF DISASTER MANAGEMENT FINANCIALLY AS WELL AS MEDICALLY.
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 CAN BE DONE BY WRITING OFF THE LOANS THEY HAVE GIVEN OR OFFERING MORE MONEY WITH LESS INTEREST FOR A LONGER PERIOD OF TIME .
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 BY EXTENDING TECHNOLOGICAL AND MEDICAL RESOURCES WHICH THEY HAVE IN PLENTY. THE DEVELOPED
WORLD
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 MUST HELP THE UNDER-DEVELOPED AS WELL AS DEVELOPING
NATIONS
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 DURING AN UNFORTUNATE EVENT, AS THEY ARE THE LEADERS OF THE MANKIND WHICH MAKES IT THEIR MORAL RESPONSIBILITY AND THEY ARE IN A MORE ADVANCED STATE OF RICHNESS AND HAVE BETTER RESOURCES TO DO SO.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Humanitarian relief
  • Infrastructure
  • Global solidarity
  • Disproportionately
  • External assistance
  • Rebuilding efforts
  • Disaster response
  • Investment in stability
  • Dependency theory
  • Responsible intervention
  • Paternalistic
  • Shared humanity
  • Sovereignty
  • Capabilities
  • Fatality rates
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