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Governments should spend money on railways rather than roads. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Introduction
Some
people
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 argue that the government should invest more
money
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 in the
construction
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 of
railways
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,
instead
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 of building roads. In my opinion, I think It is reasonable to fund more
money
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 on building new
railways
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, while I disagree with the view that the resources and materials allocated on roads should be decreased.
Body · 1
There are several reasons why more
money
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 should be spent on
railways
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.
Firstly
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,
railways
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 can connect towns and villages in different provinces, and the goods transportation on a large scale could be achieved by using trains.
Secondly
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,
railways
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, especially high-speed
railways
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, contribute to a faster movement of
people
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.
For example
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, it takes nearly 5 hours from Shanghai to Nanjing by car, while it takes only 1.5 hours by taking high-speed trains.
Finally
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, the
construction
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 of
railways
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 could provide a huge amount of workplaces, which helps to reduce the level of local unemployment.
Body · 2
However
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, the amount of
money
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 invested in building roads should not be adjusted to a lower level. Some regions are restricted by some geographic factors,
for example
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, mountains and rivers, which makes the
construction
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 of
railways
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 extremely expensive.
Besides
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,
people
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 who live in extreme property may not afford the price of taking trains, for the faster speed of
railways
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 requires a higher level
of
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price.
As a result
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, the importance of road transportation should not be ignored, for it provides a cheaper approach to the movements of
people
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.
Conclusion
In conclusion, I think governments could fund more
money
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 on building new
railways
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, but the amount of
money
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 allocated for road
construction
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 should not be decreased.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Carbon emissions
  • Mass transportation
  • Traffic congestion
  • Economic growth
  • Regional development
  • Initial investment
  • Feasibility
  • Flexibility
  • Rural areas
  • Integration
  • Sustainable
  • Efficiency
  • Infrastructure
  • Commuters
  • Public expenditure
  • Autonomous vehicles
  • Long-term investment
  • Accessibility
  • Connectivity
  • Modal shift
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