Some people say that advertising is extremely successful at persuading us to buy things. Other people think that advertising is so common that we no longer pay attention to it. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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have different views
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an advertisement is a successful way of persuading
people
to buy
things
or
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if it
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is so normal that
people
usually neglect it.
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advertising, and I believe that launching an advertisement is quite useful in selling
things
when used properly. On the one hand, there are various reasons why some
people
may argue that advertising is so common for not catching one’s eyes.
Firstly
, an advertisement can be seen almost everywhere, no matter when
people
walking on the streets or browsing
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the Internet. If there are no differences between other’s ads,
people
may have little chance to distinguish them.
Moreover
, some
people
will seem quite annoying when keep seeing the
things
they do not need.
In other words
,
people
will not pay attention to it
,
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and often overlook its existence.
For instance
, when watching a TV program,
people
tend to change channels or do other
things
when it comes to advertising time.
On the other hand
, I believe some advertisements are quite persuasive when targeting
to
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the right customers.
For example
, if a person has a demand
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buying a sofa, and the furniture-related ads keep appearing while he is searching on the Internet.
This
may lead to a higher opportunity for
this
customer to buy something through advertising. With additional attractive functions or discounts, it is likely that customers would buy the product, and even other items they are interested in. In conclusion, I would support the idea that advertising is a vital method of persuading others for buying
things
when the company has targeted
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the right person
who
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they want to sell
things
to
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • persuade
  • promote
  • attract
  • influence
  • impact
  • consumerism
  • commercialism
  • market
  • product
  • brand
  • endorsement
  • manipulative
  • saturated
  • overwhelmed
  • repetitive
  • distracting
  • irrelevant
  • exaggerated
  • misleading
  • desensitized
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