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Some people say that advertising is extremely successful at persuading us to buy things. Other people think that advertising is so common that we no longer pay attention to it. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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People
 have different views
whether
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 an advertisement is a successful way of persuading
people
 to buy
things
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it
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if it
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 is so normal that
people
 usually neglect it.
This
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 advertising, and I believe that launching an advertisement is quite useful in selling
things
 when used properly. On the one hand, there are various reasons why some
people
 may argue that advertising is so common for not catching one’s eyes.
Firstly
, an advertisement can be seen almost everywhere, no matter when
people
 walking on the streets or browsing
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the Internet. If there are no differences between other’s ads,
people
 may have little chance to distinguish them.
Moreover
, some
people
 will seem quite annoying when keep seeing the
things
 they do not need.
In other words
,
people
 will not pay attention to it
,
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 and often overlook its existence.
For instance
, when watching a TV program,
people
 tend to change channels or do other
things
 when it comes to advertising time.
On the other hand
, I believe some advertisements are quite persuasive when targeting
to
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the right customers.
For example
, if a person has a demand
of
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 buying a sofa, and the furniture-related ads keep appearing while he is searching on the Internet.
This
 may lead to a higher opportunity for
this
 customer to buy something through advertising. With additional attractive functions or discounts, it is likely that customers would buy the product, and even other items they are interested in. In conclusion, I would support the idea that advertising is a vital method of persuading others for buying
things
 when the company has targeted
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the right person
who
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 they want to sell
things
to
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • persuade
  • promote
  • attract
  • influence
  • impact
  • consumerism
  • commercialism
  • market
  • product
  • brand
  • endorsement
  • manipulative
  • saturated
  • overwhelmed
  • repetitive
  • distracting
  • irrelevant
  • exaggerated
  • misleading
  • desensitized
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