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Countries should spend money on railways rather than roads. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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Many countries are involved in executing different types of transportation facilities systems, according to the public demand. Transportation systems
such
 as road,
railway
, air and shipping.
However
, all these are used by a person in different situations. Mostly,
roads
 and railways were used by the people to move from one place to another. Investing in
railway
 systems will be added advantage to the country’s economic growth as well as in the reputation.
For instance
, if a country’s population increases rapidly in-resulting in huge traffic on the
roads
,
then
 the country should step up to the new routes by investing funds into the
railway
 system. Whereas it can be suggested to expanding the
roads
 as well.
For example
, people always think to reach as fast as they can to their desired destination. In those ,situation rails can make it easy.
Secondly
,
roads
 are
also
 very important when it comes to human life. They can move to their destinations at their convenience, using their own cars and public transportation. The government should always keep an eye to improve the
roads
 as well. Because
this
 is the basic need of a human- being.
For example
, if any pregnant lady wants to reach the city hospital for delivery, she can reach it on time if the
roads
 will be in good condition. In my opinion, the government should watch closely to every situation if there is a really a need to spend money on the
railway
 or not. Because mostly road used for long destination and use by minimum working employees. Whereas, the government should invest in the new
roads
 always to expand the city. So more and more foreign investment arrives in the country and it will be a big help in the country’s development. In the conclusion, I am disagreed to invest in the
railway
 system rather than
roads
. As I clearly mentioned that
roads
 are used more than the
railway
. So, the country should spend always on making new
roads
 to expand the area of the city so more people can live.
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