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Some people think that parents should teach children how to be good members of society. Others, however, believe that school is the place to learn this. Discuss both these views and give your own opinions.

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Nowadays, many people agree that
education
 has a significant impact on the
next
 generation.
However
, how do we define the teaching
responsibility
 that should be belonged to
parents
 or
schools
? Let us illustrate my perspectives in the below paragraphs.
First
 of all,
parents
 are role models to our offspring. From the infants to
children
 stage, our offspring copy their
parents
' behaviours, which will transform to be
kids
' attitudes. It is the reason why our educational
institutions
 are encouraged
parents
 need to participate in their
children
's activities and have regular meetings with
children
's
parents
. In reality,
parents
 need to understand that educational
institutions
 have a
responsibility
 on teaching
students
 about knowledge or academic area.
However
, teachers might not have sufficient times to understand all
students
' attitudes in deep.
Parents
 can tailor-made some courses or activities, which is suitable for their
kids
.
Additionally
, our offspring spend significant time from kindergarten to tertiary
education
.
Education
institutions
 are playing a vital role in our society.
Kids
 can learn lots of knowledge, and guidelines from
schools
 in their daily lives. In school life, teachers will pick the best
students
 to be the leader in the classroom. When
kids
 want to be leaders, they need to behave themselves in order to be leaders in the classroom.
Thus
,
students
 will be learned to be good members of the
schools
. In conclusion,
parents
 and
education
institutions
 are playing significant roles, which can
affecting
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children
's behaviours. To be a good member of our community is a long-run process.
Parents
 or
schools
 will not have the sole
responsibility
 of teaching the
next
 generation. From my perspective,
parents
 and
education
institutions
 have joint
responsibility
 for teaching the
next
 generation.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • good members of society
  • teach
  • parents
  • schools
  • responsibility
  • values
  • respect
  • empathy
  • responsibility
  • formal education
  • citizenship
  • ethics
  • social responsibility
  • lead by example
  • role models
  • conducive environment
  • extracurricular activities
  • community involvement
  • collaborate
  • holistic approach
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