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Some people think that parents should teach children how to be good members of society. Others, however, believe that school is the place to learn this. Discuss both these views and give your own opinions.

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Nowadays, many people agree that
education
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 has a significant impact on the
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 generation.
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, how do we define the teaching
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 that should be belonged to
parents
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 or
schools
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? Let us illustrate my perspectives in the below paragraphs.
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 of all,
parents
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 are role models to our offspring. From the infants to
children
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 stage, our offspring copy their
parents
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' behaviours, which will transform to be
kids
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' attitudes. It is the reason why our educational
institutions
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 are encouraged
parents
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 need to participate in their
children
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's activities and have regular meetings with
children
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's
parents
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. In reality,
parents
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 need to understand that educational
institutions
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 have a
responsibility
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 on teaching
students
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 about knowledge or academic area.
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, teachers might not have sufficient times to understand all
students
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' attitudes in deep.
Parents
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 can tailor-made some courses or activities, which is suitable for their
kids
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.
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, our offspring spend significant time from kindergarten to tertiary
education
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.
Education
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institutions
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 are playing a vital role in our society.
Kids
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 can learn lots of knowledge, and guidelines from
schools
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 in their daily lives. In school life, teachers will pick the best
students
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 to be the leader in the classroom. When
kids
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 want to be leaders, they need to behave themselves in order to be leaders in the classroom.
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,
students
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 will be learned to be good members of the
schools
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. In conclusion,
parents
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 and
education
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institutions
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 are playing significant roles, which can
affecting
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children
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's behaviours. To be a good member of our community is a long-run process.
Parents
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 or
schools
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 will not have the sole
responsibility
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 of teaching the
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 generation. From my perspective,
parents
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 and
education
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institutions
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 have joint
responsibility
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 for teaching the
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 generation.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • good members of society
  • teach
  • parents
  • schools
  • responsibility
  • values
  • respect
  • empathy
  • responsibility
  • formal education
  • citizenship
  • ethics
  • social responsibility
  • lead by example
  • role models
  • conducive environment
  • extracurricular activities
  • community involvement
  • collaborate
  • holistic approach
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