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Some people believe that individuals can do little to improve the environment, while others think that individuals have a significant role in protecting the environment. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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In recent years, environmental problems have been on the rise around the globe
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 many factors.
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 many people think that individuals can do little to improve the environment, I believe that each and every person can participate in protecting the environment by simply making minor changes to their daily routines. On the one
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, individuals can and do have the potential to minimize the amount of harm they may cause to the environment by adopting environment-conscious habits.
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, riding a bicycle to work
instead
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 of driving a car will help in reducing air pollution.
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, recycling
plastic
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 or reusing
plastic
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 cans
instead
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 of throwing them away after a single use is an effective method in limiting
plastic
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 waste in dumpsters. Given that
plastic
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 is the primary pollutant of marine and land, reducing its usage will yield benefits to our planet.
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hand
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, many are convinced that individual efforts are pointless in pollution prevention since controlling the major sources of environmental damage lies in the
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hand
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 of governments / the higher authorities .
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, Factories' harmful emissions can solely be controlled if the government regulates
it
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 with specific laws.
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 to imposing high fines on companies that are not complying with these regulations to encourage them to adopt eco-friendly systems. Private car ownership in large cities can only be restricted by the government as well and reducing the number of these vehicles is crucial to enhance the air quality in these urban areas. In conclusion, despite the fact that governments may seem to have the upper
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 in putting an end to various environmental issues, working together is necessary to see tangible changes. It is everyone’s responsibility to keep our planet clean and in its best condition.

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task achievement
Your essay provides a balanced discussion of both views and includes a clear opinion. However, be cautious of small inaccuracies and ensure all arguments are fully developed.
coherence cohesion
While the essay is generally well-structured, some ideas could be more clearly linked. Using more transitional phrases can help improve coherence.
task achievement
To strengthen your arguments, you could include more specific examples or statistics. This would help illustrate your points more effectively.
introduction conclusion present
The introduction effectively sets up the topic and presents a clear opinion.
supported main points
Good use of examples to illustrate points, such as cycling instead of driving and recycling plastic.
introduction conclusion present
The conclusion succinctly summarizes the main points and reinforces the opinion stated in the introduction.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • - Environmental degradation
  • - Sustainability
  • - Renewable energy
  • - Carbon footprint
  • - Greenhouse gases
  • - Climate change
  • - Deforestation
  • - Pollution
  • - Legislation
  • - Corporate responsibility
  • - Collective action
  • - Grassroots movement
  • - Eco-conscious choices
  • - Conservation efforts
  • - Environmental advocacy
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