In many parts if worlds, children and teenagers are spending more and more of their time indoors. What do you think are the causes if this problem? What measures could best be taken to solve it? Give reasons for your answer and include and relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience.
The environment that
children
living is quite important to them. It is easy to see lots of teenagers spent
more time Wrong verb form
spend
stay
Wrong verb form
staying
indoor
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indoors
instead
of the outdoor activities
in
nowadays. In my opinion, there must have some reasons that affect Change preposition
apply
this
problem, and it should be solve
as soon as possible.
Rapidly Change the verb form
be solved
develop
generation coming with lots of attractive things that impede teenagers go out from home. Wrong verb form
developed
First
of all, children
are easily
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easy
to stock
in Change the verb form
stocked
internet
world. As social media Add an article
the internet
released
and used by Add a missing verb
was released
people
, it helped people
connect with each other quickly and convenience
. But it totally declined the opportunities for Replace the word
conveniently
children
to interact with people
face to face which may cause children
be
more passive in their life when they go outside. Another reason is that Add the particle
to be
variety
Correct article usage
a variety
entertainment
Change preposition
of entertainment
in
computer or Change preposition
on
smart phone
Correct your spelling
smartphone
were
much more interesting than outdoor Change the verb form
was
activities
for youngster
. Lots of traditional games or Add an article
the youngster
a youngster
activities
are unknown in
nowadays Change preposition
apply
for
Change preposition
to
children
. Games in
electronic device Change preposition
on
seems
to be more interactive to young Change the verb form
seem
people
.
It is not so health
for Replace the word
healthy
children
to staying
Wrong verb form
stay
indoor
for Correct your spelling
indoors
long
time which Add an article
a long
need
some solution to prevent. Parents should Change the verb form
needs
be notice
Change the verb form
notice
about
Change preposition
of
children
’s daily activities
. If kids have low
desire of going outside, parents should be active to encourage their kids Add an article
the low
a low
try
some fresh things outside. Join some school club or Add the particle
to try
sport
team are more meaningful and Change the noun form
sports
Correct your spelling
healthy
heathy
than play Correct your spelling
healthy
computer
all day. Play sport must be a suitable choice for Correct article usage
a computer
children
walk
out from home, not only can train their energy but Fix the infinitive
to walk
also
can explore their horizon
.
The Fix the agreement mistake
horizons
children
from all over the world have same
problem of stock in the houses. The reasons are clear to link with Change the article
the same
high
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the high
develop
of technology and the lazy of the human. It is necessary to solve Replace the word
development
this
problem with some simple solutions.Submitted by patrick880613 on
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