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people now a days work hard to buy more things. this had made our life more comfortable but it is a pity many tradition values have been lost on the way to such materialism.to what extenet do you agree or disagree with the statement.

#people #work #had #life #pity #tradition #values #materialism #extenet
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 concurrent era communities are doing
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 hard
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 for owning many things and living a lavish
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. Some
people
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 believe that by running behind
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 a comfortable and materialistic
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 they have loose cultural and moral values. I majorly agree with
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 notion and I support my stance in the forthcoming paragraphs.
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 hard
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 in their jobs and business they can increase their revenue and they can provide a luxurious and comfortable
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 to their family members. If
people
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 are doing hard
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 over
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 that increases a nation's economic strength.
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, the USA is a country where
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 do
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 hard
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 on weekdays
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 they live their
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 on weekdays enjoying parties and travelling.
On the other hand
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, if a person is doing intense
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 they can lose the importance of their culture because they do not have
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 a
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 to live their
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 according to morals and values. To elaborate, they do not have the importance of any festivals because they live far away from their native country and do not get
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 an environment to live their lives in
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 a prospect. They have
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 lost their social
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 by doing extra endeavours and lack
time
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. According to an article published by a CNN newspaper, forty out of a hundred are going away and do not have
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 for family gatherings due to their workload and running behind the money to live a high standard of living. To conclude, I strongly opine that
people
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 are doing tough
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 and full-
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work
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, somehow they are losing their cultural value and are getting alone to live a comfortable and better
life
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.
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