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people now a days work hard to buy more things. this had made our life more comfortable but it is a pity many tradition values have been lost on the way to such materialism.to what extenet do you agree or disagree with the statement.

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In
this
 concurrent era communities are doing
such
 hard
work
 for owning many things and living a lavish
life
. Some
people
 believe that by running behind
such
 a comfortable and materialistic
life
 they have loose cultural and moral values. I majorly agree with
this
 notion and I support my stance in the forthcoming paragraphs.
To begin
 with, by doing
such
 hard
work
 in their jobs and business they can increase their revenue and they can provide a luxurious and comfortable
life
 to their family members. If
people
 are doing hard
work
 over
time
 that increases a nation's economic strength.
For example
, the USA is a country where
people
 do
such
 hard
work
 on weekdays
then
 they live their
life
 on weekdays enjoying parties and travelling.
On the other hand
, if a person is doing intense
work
 they can lose the importance of their culture because they do not have
such
 a
time
 to live their
life
 according to morals and values. To elaborate, they do not have the importance of any festivals because they live far away from their native country and do not get
such
 an environment to live their lives in
such
 a prospect. They have
also
 lost their social
life
 by doing extra endeavours and lack
time
. According to an article published by a CNN newspaper, forty out of a hundred are going away and do not have
time
 for family gatherings due to their workload and running behind the money to live a high standard of living. To conclude, I strongly opine that
people
 are doing tough
work
 and full-
time
work
, somehow they are losing their cultural value and are getting alone to live a comfortable and better
life
.
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