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An increasing number of professionals, such as doctors and teachers, are leaving their own poorer countries to work in developed countries. What prombles does this cause? What can be done to deal with this situation?

#professionals #doctors #teachers #countries #work #prombles #situation
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that very qualified
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professionals
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 leave their under-developed
countries
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 and prefers to work in a developed
country
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.
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causes
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 and possible solutions to deal with them. The major thing which ultimately leads them to
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 of leaving a
country
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 because of financial issues. The paying scale annually in under-developed
countries
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 is very low as compared to big economy budget
countries
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. Another factor which
causes
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 the diversion of
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 to prefer developed
countries
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 is the lack of
opportunities
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 in their own
country
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 these are those problems which really matter to quality
professionals
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, there are solutions which can eliminate these
causes
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.  The most important factors to remember in order to solve these
causes
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. The
first
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 thing that should be done is to increase their financials in form of salaries, and allowances. When they will be relaxed about their finances, ultimately they will not only work more passionately but
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 will prefer to live in their own
country
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. Research shows, that
opportunities
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 are the pillar of the
country
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. More they will be strong better will be the economy of the
country
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. At a government level,
opportunities
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 should be created. It will help the experts in their field to learn more practically and enhance their expertise. Government can play its part by considering the above factors. It will not only better for the
professionals
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 as well as for the economy. In conclusion, it has always been seen that people experts in their field like to move from an under-developed
country
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 to a developed
country
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. It can be controlled at the government level by providing more means of
opportunities
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 to
professionals
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 and by providing them with better annual salary packages.
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