Nowadays on-line shopping has become more popular than in-store shopping. Is it a positive or a negative development? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant example from your own knowledge or experience.

These days,
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shopping is more popular than in-store shopping. There are pros and cons to some developments counties in the world. In my
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I
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agree that
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shopping is giving us many benefits.
Firstly
,
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shopping helps us to save money and
also
time. In fact,
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shopping is easier for us. I like to point
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my experiences, I love a dress in China but I do not want to visit there. So, I decided to
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on-line
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by
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Taobao
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the Taoboa
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app. It helps me to save my money
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buying air
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and
also
renting a hotel in China.
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, if I go
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in-store for shopping I might spend at least two hours in
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.
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me
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I prefer
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shopping rather than shopping in-store.
Secondly
, you can
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any
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times
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. Of course, if you want to
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shopping
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in store
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you probably think about your weekend, but for shopping on apps you can
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your
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items when you are available.
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, they have many styles for you to choose
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It is easier and
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us a
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. In conclusion,
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shopping or in-store are can be
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benefits
beneifits
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and drawbacks. It depends on what people like to do. But for
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I love shopping
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rather than
in
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store
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