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Many museums charge for admission while others are free. Do you think the advantages of charging for admission outweigh the disadvantages?

#museums #charge #admission
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the chart above explaining about the
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earnings
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 between 2015 and 2016
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 percentage of each
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 compared with every year. Overall we can see that the
export
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earnings
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of
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 2015 to 2016
were
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gradually increased. 
to begin
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 with there are
some
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various
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 of exports from the highest to the lowest
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 of 2015-2016. According to the
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categories
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 we can notice that the values percentage of petroleum products
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 a tiny fraction, in spite of, it had the most
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 of all
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 in 2015-2016.
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, engineered goods and textiles had rapidly
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 from
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others
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, particularly
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the textiles despite
of
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it being the least
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,
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however
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 it had significantly
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 from 2015 to 2016 and
it
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was up to more than 15%.
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, there has been an increase in agricultural products even though it was being the least growth in
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earnings
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.
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, after looking
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 those four
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 there has been
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 gems and jewellery which dip up to 5.18% from 2015. To summarize, the highest value of
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 was still from petroleum products and there was an opportunity for some
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 growth
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 as engineered goods and textiles to contribute more for exports
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 in the future.
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