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Many museums charge for admission while others are free. Do you think the advantages of charging for admission outweigh the disadvantages?

#museums #charge #admission
the chart above explaining about the
export
earnings
 between 2015 and 2016
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 percentage of each
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 compared with every year. Overall we can see that the
export
earnings
of
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 2015 to 2016
were
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gradually increased. 
to begin
 with there are
some
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various
categories
 of exports from the highest to the lowest
earnings
 of 2015-2016. According to the
first
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category
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categories
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 we can notice that the values percentage of petroleum products
gaining
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 a tiny fraction, in spite of, it had the most
earnings
 of all
categories
 in 2015-2016.
Furthermore
, engineered goods and textiles had rapidly
grow
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 from
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other
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others
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categories
, particularly
for
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the textiles despite
of
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it being the least
earnings
,
however
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 it had significantly
increase
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 from 2015 to 2016 and
it
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was up to more than 15%.
Moreover
, there has been an increase in agricultural products even though it was being the least growth in
export
earnings
.
On the other hand
, after looking
to
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 those four
categories
 there has been
slightly
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 different
on
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 gems and jewellery which dip up to 5.18% from 2015. To summarize, the highest value of
export
 was still from petroleum products and there was an opportunity for some
categories
 growth
such
 as engineered goods and textiles to contribute more for exports
earnings
 in the future.
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