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the plans below show a harbour in 2000 and how it looks today. summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The provided
map
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 illustrates the main changes during a 24-year period from 2000 until at present.
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, it is evident that there are eight features which have been constructed, including a new showers and toilets area, a
path
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 to the main road from the square car park, a displacement in the locations of fishing boat zone and
marina
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, cafes and shops space, a
path
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 to the disused castle, a hotel, a private
beach
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, expanding dock part during
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 period. In the former
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, there was a rectangular showers and toilets area, a rectangular car park with a
path
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 to the main road in the northwest of the
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 near a rectangular
marina
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 which belonged to private yachts that in the latter
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 the locations of the fishing boat and
marina
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 is changed with each other.
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, there used to be a disused castle in the southeast of the
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 which at present is converted into a hotel with a specific
path
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 to roads which runs to the lifeboat zone. In the latter
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, the dock area for passenger ferries is demolished to make way for a more spacious dock part.
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, one of the two public
beach
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 areas which was near the new hotel is assigned to a private
beach
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. it is noticeable that the
marina
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 in the second
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 is expanded and a new rectangular cafe and shop space was made near the expanded
marina
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 and lifeboat part. As can be seen, the public
beach
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 on the northeast of the layout and car park
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 showers and toilets have remained unchanged.
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task achievement
Your essay covers all the main changes in the harbour over the 24-year period, but be sure to break down the features in a more structured manner.
coherence cohesion
Try to provide a clear and concise introduction and conclusion to give your essay a polished start and end.
coherence cohesion
Organize your points systematically, perhaps by grouping similar changes together, to enhance the overall flow of your essay.
task achievement
You have effectively identified and described the major changes happening in the harbour.
task achievement
Your explanations are generally clear and comprehensive.
coherence cohesion
Use of linking words such as 'furthermore', 'additionally' contributes to the cohesion of the essay.

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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • harbour (or harbor)
  • docks
  • shipping lanes
  • warehouses
  • recreational areas
  • infrastructure
  • additions
  • removals
  • facilities
  • environmental sustainability
  • economic impact
  • local community
  • capacity
  • technological advancements
  • industrial shipping
  • recreational use
  • surrounding infrastructure
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