the plans below show a harbour in 2000 and how it looks today. summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The provided
map
illustrates the main changes during a 24-year period from 2000 until at present.
Overall
, it is evident that there are eight features which have been constructed, including a new showers and toilets area, a
path
to the main road from the square car park, a displacement in the locations of fishing boat zone and
marina
, cafes and shops space, a
path
to the disused castle, a hotel, a private
beach
, expanding dock part during
this
period. In the former
map
, there was a rectangular showers and toilets area, a rectangular car park with a
path
to the main road in the northwest of the
map
near a rectangular
marina
which belonged to private yachts that in the latter
map
the locations of the fishing boat and
marina
is changed with each other.
Furthermore
, there used to be a disused castle in the southeast of the
map
which at present is converted into a hotel with a specific
path
to roads which runs to the lifeboat zone. In the latter
map
, the dock area for passenger ferries is demolished to make way for a more spacious dock part.
Additionally
, one of the two public
beach
areas which was near the new hotel is assigned to a private
beach
. it is noticeable that the
marina
in the second
map
is expanded and a new rectangular cafe and shop space was made near the expanded
marina
and lifeboat part. As can be seen, the public
beach
on the northeast of the layout and car park
as well as
showers and toilets have remained unchanged.
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task achievement
Your essay covers all the main changes in the harbour over the 24-year period, but be sure to break down the features in a more structured manner.
coherence cohesion
Try to provide a clear and concise introduction and conclusion to give your essay a polished start and end.
coherence cohesion
Organize your points systematically, perhaps by grouping similar changes together, to enhance the overall flow of your essay.
task achievement
You have effectively identified and described the major changes happening in the harbour.
task achievement
Your explanations are generally clear and comprehensive.
coherence cohesion
Use of linking words such as 'furthermore', 'additionally' contributes to the cohesion of the essay.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • harbour (or harbor)
  • docks
  • shipping lanes
  • warehouses
  • recreational areas
  • infrastructure
  • additions
  • removals
  • facilities
  • environmental sustainability
  • economic impact
  • local community
  • capacity
  • technological advancements
  • industrial shipping
  • recreational use
  • surrounding infrastructure
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