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Today people are surrounded by advertising. This affects what people think is important and has a negative impact on people's lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Advertisements are surrounding the present public which
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 what people think is necessary and
also
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 a negative impact on the population. In
this
 essay, I will support
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also
 mention the negative causes with relatable examples. To commence with the definition of advertisement
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Advertising is made for convincing the public that the product being advertised is effective in their lives to make it easy and comfortable. With the help of it, illiterates in a country will
also
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 knowledge regarding the product due to the visual representations which
is
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common
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 method of it.
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, if someone needs to buy a mobile phone, he will surely get attracted to the smartphone advertisement resulting
him
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to gather
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 knowledge and
purchase
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 the mobile which meets the demand of the user.
Moreover
, as our grandes said "If the god lies,
then
 the devil is there too",
Similarly
 if the advertisements have some good
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affects
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,
then
it
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they
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also
have
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 some bad
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influence
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influences
 as they only advertise
about
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the feature of the thing and hide the negatives.
Which
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results
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 a buyer facing
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a lot
alot
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 of issues.
Also
, the number of advertisements
are
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 increasing day-by-day which is
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a lot
alot
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a lot
 of disrupting and annoying
specially
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in
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 devices and
also
force
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 the public to buy the product even if they do not need it that much. In Conclusion,
this
 publicity is playing a vital role in
life
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the life
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 of
sellars
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sellers
 and buyers both. But not letting the user know about the negatives of goods is a negative impact.
Accordingly
, the publicity today, which is being done must
also
 feature their negatives and to show only the person who is willing to buy not to annoy the whole multitudes whether what it is must depend on buyer's choice
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