Today people are surrounded by advertising. This affects what people think is important and has a negative impact on people's lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Advertisements are surrounding the present public which
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what people think is necessary and
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a negative impact on the population. In
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mention the negative causes with relatable examples. To commence with the definition of advertisement
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Advertising is made for convincing the public that the product being advertised is effective in their lives to make it easy and comfortable. With the help of it, illiterates in a country will
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knowledge regarding the product due to the visual representations which
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common
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method of it.
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, if someone needs to buy a mobile phone, he will surely get attracted to the smartphone advertisement resulting
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to gather
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knowledge and
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the mobile which meets the demand of the user.
Moreover
, as our grandes said "If the god lies,
then
the devil is there too",
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if the advertisements have some good
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,
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also
have
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some bad
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influence
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influences
as they only advertise
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the feature of the thing and hide the negatives.
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results
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a buyer facing
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a lot
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of issues.
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, the number of advertisements
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increasing day-by-day which is
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of disrupting and annoying
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in
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devices and
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the public to buy the product even if they do not need it that much. In Conclusion,
this
publicity is playing a vital role in
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of
sellars
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sellers
and buyers both. But not letting the user know about the negatives of goods is a negative impact.
Accordingly
, the publicity today, which is being done must
also
feature their negatives and to show only the person who is willing to buy not to annoy the whole multitudes whether what it is must depend on buyer's choice
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