The use of social media is replacing face to face interection among many people in society do you think that advantage outweigh the disadvantage
Nowadays, social
media
is become
a major part of Change to the active voice
becomes
has become
people
life, and it Change noun form
people's
push
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pushes
people
away from each other. Normally, people
will get to socialize by
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apply
face
to face
. But these days, people
are typing on the phone
more than talking to the
real person. Correct article usage
a
this
statement will clarify the the
fact that most Remove the redundancy
apply
people
are get
into social Change the verb form
are getting
media
more than Correct your spelling
interact
interest
interect
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interact
face
to face
.
First
of all, people
that addicted to the device, they
will spend their time on their Correct pronoun usage
apply
phone
. Fix the agreement mistake
phones
Furthermore
, it will be hard for them to fit in the society than other people
. For
example
when we go to the restaurants, we will see the table that has many Add a comma
,example
people
on, but they do not communicate with each other. They decided to scroll their phone
up and down. However
, social media
is not a good thing when people
give too much attention in
it.
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to
Furthermore
, technology give
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gives
people
more oppotunity
to communicate with Correct your spelling
opportunity
people
around the world. This
make
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makes
people
do
not want to socialize with Unnecessary verb
apply
people
that there are
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is
face
with. Wrong verb form
faced
For example
, people
are
like to download an app that allows Unnecessary verb
apply
you
to communicate with other Correct pronoun usage
them
people
because it is more enjoy
and challenging. Replace the word
enjoyable
Although
, some people
take it Correct your spelling
seriously
seriousely
and sometimes it Correct your spelling
seriously
bring
them in a sexual Change the verb form
brings
ways
.
In conclusion, I totally believe that social Correct the article-noun agreement
way
media
is replacing face to
Add a hyphen
face-to-face
face
Correct your spelling
interaction
interection
from a lot of Correct your spelling
interaction
people
in the community, due to the fact that wherever we go, we will get to see people
holding their device
while walking or eating, other than Fix the agreement mistake
devices
pay
attention to Wrong verb form
paying
people
besides
them. I hope this
statement will get to help people
from the phone
to take care and
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of and
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interact
interest
interect
with Correct your spelling
interact
people
in the societySubmitted by phakinyiangyong on
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