The NRA believe more guns make the country safer. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this?

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It is often argued that more
weapon
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weapons

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make
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country
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safer. I strongly disagree with
this
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statement and think that
guns
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make
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country
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more dangerous.
First
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of all, I reckon that the impact of
guns
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is huge, school
shooting
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shootings

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and terror acts happen in the countries
such
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as
Usa
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USA

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very often
,
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because the
weapons
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can be purchased by 18 years old individuals.
This
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could be prevented by
government
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the government

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,
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nonetheless
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,nonetheless

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constitution of the
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USA
Usa
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US

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allows people to buy
weapons
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.
Moreover
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,
guns
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and knives are available almost in every town in the United States of America.
For instance
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, the situation in
recent
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a recent
the recent

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primary school shooting that has happened in Texas, 20 people have been killed by
18 year old
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18-year-old

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individual
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individuals

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with mental and psychopathic problems,
hence
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18 children under the age of 14
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have been
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been
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were

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killed.
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That's
That
That is
Thats
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That's

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why it is very dangerous and silly to think that
guns
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make
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country
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the country

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safer.
Secondly
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, an excess of
weapons
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may provide opportunities for felons and criminals to buy
big
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the big
a big

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and cheap
amount
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amounts

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of arsenal.
In other words
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, they will be
armored
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armoured

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like
a
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apply

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police or army
that
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which

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may cause
a
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apply

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big trouble and consequences for society.
Subsequently
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,
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country
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the country

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by trying to
safe
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save

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itself, make an
opportunities
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opportunity

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to destroy itself.
For example
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, the situation that
has
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happened in January in Kazakhstan demonstrated that felons and terrorists can cause
a
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apply

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big trouble to
government
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the government

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by stealing
guns
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from gunshops and
weaponmarkets
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weapon markets
weapons markets

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.
Thus
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, even if governments around the world will produce
weapons
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,
it
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they

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need to be in
usage
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the usage

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of
regular
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the regular

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army or police not in
people
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people's

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use. To sum up, I strongly
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believe
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belive
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believe

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that more
guns
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make
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country
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not a safe place,
in
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contrast
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it provides with
weapons
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felons and terrorists and because of
this
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school shootings and terrors happen in the world.

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