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Some people think that public libraries are no longer important due to the availability of digital information. Others believe that libraries still play a crucial role in society. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

With the advancements in technology, Many
people
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 believe that
libraries
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 are of no use because of the virtual display of
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,
while
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 others argue that
libraries
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 play a key role in the community and should be maintained. Despite the benefits of both views, I am inclined to argue that walk-in
libraries
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 are essential in society. On the one hand, modernization has increased the rate at which
people
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access
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information
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 online, making it easy for individuals to read any book at their convenience.
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, a digital application
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 as Kindle can give a reader a variety of options on books or journals, which can be accessed at any moment in time.
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 provides comfort and fosters reading ability which cannot be achieved in terms of public
libraries
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.
On the other hand
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, Public
libraries
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 offer
access
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 to some historical books or
information
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, which are not on the internet.
This
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 is particularly important in terms of international conflict novels, in order to hinder some
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.
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, some
people
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 prefer traditional reading methods in order to minimize their screen time
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 and to highlight important
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.
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, an elderly person would choose to read a physical book rather than virtual materials, and
this
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 is because of the ease
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 understanding and has been used to
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 method of reading.
Additionally
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,
people
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 in rural areas mostly have limited
access
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 to the internet, which can disrupt their ability to hybrid
information
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. In conclusion,
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 most
information
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 can be accessed digitally, I believe public
libraries
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 are still vital in society, because they provide
access
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 to wider publications and rural populations can benefit greatly from that.
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, a balance between digital and walk-in
libraries
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 can promote a well-rounded society.

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Improve the logical flow between your main points. Transition phrases can help connect ideas more smoothly.
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Ensure that all your points are fully developed and that examples are more explicitly tied back to your arguments.
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Your introduction clearly presents both sides of the argument and states your opinion well.
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You included relevant examples to support your points, which enhance the argument significantly.
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