Some people think that the government should establish free libraries in each town. Others, however, believe that it is a waste of money since the public can use the Internet at home to obtain information. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.

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It is often argued that the government should invest in free
libraries
in every town, while others contend that it is a waste
a waste
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of money as
people
could gain knowledge online from the comfort of home. In my point of view, I think
libraries
are still important to be
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built
although
people
could have free access to a range of
information
online. On the one hand, it is commonly considered that
libraries
are the best place for study.
This
is because there are no loud noises and a plethora of
books
in the
libraries
, which creates a quiet place for
people
to concentrate
themselves
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without any disruption.If
people
study online at home, there are lots of
distraction
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distractions
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such
as the noises from the neighbours, the games console, the TV and so online, which all could have
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adverse impact on the level of obtaining the knowledge.
On the other hand
, the
information
on the internet may be extensive but limited in depth. A key reason for
this
is that anyone or any company could publish
contents
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without
controlled
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by authorities,while
books
have a strict approval system.
This
could lead to a huge amount of time
of
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searching for the correct answers, which may hamper
the
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productivity and cause frustration.
For instance
,
information
about history is better to be learned from
books
because the stories online might cause the readers to question
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its
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authenticity,
however
, the
books
could spare
people
from
this
. In conclusion, I believe that the government still should spend money on the
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of
libraries
whereas there is
information
online for
people
to acquire.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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