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Band 4.5

Some people think that public transport should be free, especially in big cities. Do you think free public transportation will have more advantages or disadvantages?

Many
people
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 believe that public
transport
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 should be available for everyone,
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in
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apply
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particular
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,
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apply
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 in towns with a big population.
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 essay will illustrate how it will help some
people
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but
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 will
also
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 show that
this
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 can incur serious problems. Whilst acknowledging that there are advantages, the essay will argue that the disadvantages of free public transportation outweigh the pros. The two main benefits of a gratis vehicle are saving money and a perk for dysfunctional families who cannot afford a car. If
busses
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will be
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are
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 accessible for
everybody
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everybody,
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 it is a chance to walk by it and you will be able to
set aside
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save
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 some money.
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, a friend of mine from Japan could keep some
amount
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apply
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of mine by using a
gratis
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free
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 bus.
Furthermore
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, it will influence the financial situation of disadvantaged families. Since it is free, there is no need to pay even a bit
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 it will
assist to
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help
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 maintain finances.
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, in Kazakhstan, a bus is
approachable
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accessible
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 for children until they turn 18.
On the other hand
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, it has several cons
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such
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, such
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 as the rising greenhouse gas emissions and traffic congestion. As more and more residents will walk by
bus
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bus,
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 the number of
transport
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 will go up as well. As an illustration, France is a country where public transportation is free;
however
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, it
led
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 to environmental problems, especially the emission that dreadfully impacts nature. The more
people
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 will apply an accessible
transport
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, the more traffic jams will be
due to
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 the increase
of
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in
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 vehicles.
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, Uzbekistan has free public
transport
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;
nevertheless
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, it has to confront traffic jams.
This
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 affirms that
this
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 idea has more negative consequences, as opposed to positive ones.
To sum up
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,
although
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 it has certain pros
such
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 as making life easier for poor
people
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, it has more
adversely
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influential aspects
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effects
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 on the environment. I believe that
drawbacks
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the drawbacks
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 overweight
advantages
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the advantages
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.

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task response
Your essay has a clear view and a plan. To push your score higher, build each idea well. Make sure every point you state links to your view. Add more clear, strong examples that fit each point.
coherence
Use simple, smooth links. Start each paragraph with a clear idea sentence. Use words like First, Also, But, However, For example. Keep each paragraph to one main idea.
task response
Clear stance and clear end says your view.
coherence
Decent layout with four parts: intro, 2 body parts, conclusion.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:

...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • public transport
  • urban environment
  • economic benefits
  • local businesses
  • traffic congestion
  • greenhouse gas emissions
  • social inclusion
  • marginalized groups
  • service quality
  • overcrowding
  • funding
  • transport services
  • financial burden
  • accessibility
  • essential services
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