Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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​Sometimes, it is said that sharing as much data as possible in the field of scientific research, business and academy is beneficial.
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, other
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that some
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should be kept secret. Personally, I believe some of the
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needs to be secretive in order to protect
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against some
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unpleasant issues. ​On the one hand, many
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like exchanging
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to help the
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regardless of their backgrounds, whether rich or poor broaden
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knowledge and change their perspectives on their respective fields. Meaning that gathering
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as much as they can
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help them gain a good value of knowledge for the development of the society.
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, the outbreak of the virus, Covid-19 made a huge impact around the world. Every part of the earth, countries sharing as much data as they knew played an important role in letting
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know what the consequences would be and how they could prevent
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. ​
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, some
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like to keep valuable
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unknown so that unnecessary damages will not occur in technology trading.
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, some application developers made premium versions to protect their private
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to be exposed
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outsiders. Not only in these technology fields,
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should not be in the public’s
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to prevent citizens from being over panic and protesting unimportant
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.
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, they like to keep
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away from the
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. ​In conclusion,
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everyone has their own opinions on
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, I personally think that trading
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for unnecessary purposes may just lead to unwanted and unrepairable damages to our own
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • information sharing
  • scientific research
  • business
  • academic world
  • advancement of knowledge
  • progress
  • collaboration
  • cross-disciplinary research
  • open access
  • democratization of information
  • transparency
  • credibility
  • intellectual property
  • security concerns
  • commercial interests
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