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The key to solving the environmental problem is simple: the present generation is willing to accept a less comfortable life for the sake of the future generation. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#generation #life #sake #future
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environmental
enviromental
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environmental
 issue is an inevitable topic . Few ethnic groups postulate that there are considered it
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the present
generation
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 responsibility .I vehemently accord with the given statement .
This
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 , the most discernible is alteration .To be more specific , they are using natural gas
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 resulting pollution .Another paramount ground for my
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belief
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owner
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, employees , students , and children .
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 , my school
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 we save
this
 environment
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 , they are thinking with them about the solutions of it .
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 a lot of pictures about
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 it . Is there any other reason behind my agreeing ? ,
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 there are . protect , they are saving water by not overusing it and
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reduce
 their water use during entering the bathroom and cooking . These are some
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 concrete reasons for agreeing with the presented argument . To summarize the composition , the essay explicated the present
generation
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 generation . So , I fully agree with it .
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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sustainable living
  • excessive consumption
  • environmental degradation
  • technological advancements
  • innovation
  • renewable energy
  • sustainable farming
  • waste management
  • policy changes
  • global cooperation
  • balanced approach
  • sacrifice
  • awareness
  • sustainability
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