Some people think that work is the most important thing in a person's life. Without the success of a career, life becomes meaningless. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Many people believe that accomplishments at a job are vital to derive greater satisfaction out of
life
. In my opinion,
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life
becomes worthless without success in a job because success motivates
one
to devote himself more towards duties at work,
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more power and money thereby allowing
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one to
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secure a better
future
.
Firstly
,
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professional achievement is vital in
life
as it assists in fulfilling the self-actualization needs,
In other words
, the more the achievement, the more is the self-respect! Challenges tackled and resolved gives more self-confidence thereby leading to
further
progress. And as
one
leads
further
with
better
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understanding and self-belief
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the project, the capability of shaping the desired outcomes is enhanced. That's where the victory of a task at employment lies!
Secondly
, and admittedly, occupational accomplishments result in monetary gains at work. Everyone desires more comfort and convenience in
life
and
that is
achievable with the help of earnings.
Therefore
,
one
can actually follow a better lifestyle. That
also
includes
,
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securing a better
future
not only by saving more income but
also
by being a lighthouse for
one
's own children's education and
future
. Ultimately,
one
can have a peaceful retirement with a more contented
life
. To conclude, it is not wrong to say that
life
is perceived as more contented by many people when they achieve milestones in their
career
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.
One
can see many intangible benefits;
such
as increased
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self-pride
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, better living conditions due to the plight of money flow and a protected
future
; that has resulted in feeling satisfied with
life
. And
this
is the outcome of success at employment.
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