Education and health care should be funded by the government and free for everyone. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?
Education
and health
care
are basic necessities for every living soul. Without proper education
and health
care
system
no nation can prosper and even cannot Add a comma
,system
sustain
. Many people Correct pronoun usage
itselfsustain
argues
that it is Change the verb form
argue
Correct article usage
the government
government
responsibility to provide basic Change noun form
government's
education
and health
care
to its
every citizen for free. I strongly believe Correct pronoun usage
apply
with
Change preposition
in
this
Correct your spelling
viewpoint
view point
.
To commence with, in developing Correct your spelling
viewpoint
countries
huge
proportion of society is illiterate. Most children in these developing Correct article usage
a huge
countries
are without basic education
. These children’s
are even cannot read and write. In developing Change noun form
children
countries
education
for kids is too costly that many families cannot even afford it. For example
, in Pakistans
rural areas most Change noun form
Pakistan's
of
Change preposition
apply
children
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the children
working
because their parents cannot afford to send them Wrong verb form
work
in
school. These young kids are working in restaurants so they can support their families. Change preposition
to
Hence
, It is the government
responsibility to provide Basic Change noun form
government's
education
to every kid.
Moreover
, in developing countries
life expectancy is too low comparable
to developed Replace the word
compared
countries
. Infant mortality is also
a
biggest concern in these Change the article
the
countries
because of illiteracy. Most of the population is without any health
insurance and per capita income is also
too small. These factors contribute to lowest
life expectancy in developing Correct article usage
the lowest
countries
. For instance
, in Pakistan
most cancer diseases are unnoticed because families do not have money to do Add a comma
,Pakistan
costly
Add an article
the costly
a costly
test
. Even if someone knows he got cancer he cannot afford Fix the agreement mistake
tests
costly
Add an article
the costly
procedure
. Governments need to help people by giving them free Fix the agreement mistake
procedures
health
services.
In conclusion, providing health
care
and education
is the government
responsibility to its citizen. It is the right of every Change noun form
government's
tex payer
citizen to get basic necessities from the Add a hyphen
tex-payer
government
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite