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Why do people chose to live in cities. What is your opinion?

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Introduction
Nowadays, people often chose to migrate to
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the city
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city
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cities
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 leaving
villages
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 and small towns behind. There are several reasons why one might choose to live in
metropolitan
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a metropolitan
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 including work, connections and
quality
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 of
life
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.
Body paragraph 1
First
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 of all, a
city
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 has
a
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apply
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more job opportunities and often
better
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a better
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 working environment and
wage
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wages
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. These factors are often crucial to an individual when choosing
place
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a place
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 to reside. Big cities would often have available jobs for any type of
specialty
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 and would often provide them with safe working
space
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 and enjoyable
employer
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employment
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.
Furthermore
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, an individual may decide to alter their living location to improve and expand their contacts. In the
city
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, it is conceivable to find more meaningful connections with people who might share
same
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the same
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 interests.
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, numerous individuals wish to relocate from small
villages
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 to metropolitans,
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to improve
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quality
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their quality
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 of
life
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.
Quality
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 of education, healthcare and other services is often better in more populated areas. Families and single
travelers
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travellers
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 can start a new
life
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where
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 not only work but other daily aspects
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of
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if
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of
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life
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 are improved.
Body paragraph 2
In my opinion, there are certainly many advantages for a person who decided to move to an urban area,
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 alleviating several aspects of
life
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.
However
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, with mass
migration
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,migration
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 there will be drawbacks. Social issues would arise for
villages
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 that are left behind, as well as overcrowded cities. For
villages
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, constantly decreasing population will become a
hinder
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hindrance
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 to development. Meanwhile, overpopulation in growing areas might lead to pollution, expensive housing and
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an increase
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of
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crime
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the crime
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 rate.
Conclusion
In conclusion, there are many reasons why one would like to move to a
city
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 including job opportunities,
to make
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making
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 connections and
improve
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improving
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quality
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 of
life
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.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • urban aesthetics
  • promoting tourism
  • boosting local economies
  • enhancing residents' quality of life
  • mental well-being
  • functional design
  • urban challenges
  • population density
  • transportation
  • housing
  • conflict between beauty and functionality
  • urban planning
  • aesthetic appeal
  • practicality
  • case studies
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