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Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#people #choices
In
this
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life
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Moreover
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technological advancements. As long as some argued that advent of the technology has
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made many choices
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 the communities. In
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To begin
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 becoming closer to each other because of
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technological revolution.
Besides
, presently, they have a great chance to do their
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 through computer-based science relative to their own desires and satisfaction.
For example
, we have
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many apps where we can buy any products with our interest from local as well as international countries,
such
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As a result
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too many choices
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always
alway
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always
 trying to acquire
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 things and
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because of
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 that they have gained fulfilment
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a
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choosy.
Additionally
, whenever students
also
 have various access to learn studies and they have attempted to get what are the best and useful learning materials for their daily routines.
For instance
, a child who was able to do
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 had strived to get knowledge through
plethora
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 of learning tools
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 his choices
like wise
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 YouTube and Facebook videos.
Consequently
, they have attempted to acquire
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productive and more essential websites among other several tools. In conclusion, in my perspective, I completely agree that
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this
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 as long as we have a great opportunity ensure our
life
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a better
life
,
definetely
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definitely
 they ought to select beneficial factors which help them to make
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a positive manner.
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  • overwhelmed
  • decision fatigue
  • paralysis by analysis
  • consumerism
  • globalization
  • personal autonomy
  • market saturation
  • option overload
  • decision-making process
  • psychological well-being
  • buyer's remorse
  • customization
  • trade-offs
  • minimalism
  • information superhighway
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