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Some people believe that governments should pay for healthcare and education, but others disagree with this opinion.  Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

#people #governments #healthcare #education
SOME PEOPLE ARGUE THAT CITIZENS SHOULD REACH HEALTH BENEFITS AND
EDUCATION
 FOR FREE WHICH MEANS THE EXPENDITURES OF THESE SERVINGS SHOULD BE PAID BY
GOVERNMENTS
 WHILST OTHERS DO DISAGREE.
THIS
 ESSAY WILL EXPLAIN WHAT POSSIBLE REASONS CAN BE FOR THESE OPINIONS AND WHY I TOTALLY DISAGREE WITH THE
FIRST
 STATEMENT. ON THE ONE HAND, SOME PEOPLE THINK THAT
EDUCATION
 AND HEALTH SERVICES HAVE TO BE COVERED BY
GOVERNMENTS
 BECAUSE PEOPLE SERVE YEARS FOR THEIR
COUNTRY
 AND PAY TAXES REGULARLY. TO AN EXTENT, WORKERS GIVE PHYSICAL EFFORT AND PAY TAXES FOR YEARS WHICH MEAN THEY PROVIDE BOTH WORKLOAD AND MONEY TO THE
COUNTRY
. AS A NATURAL RESULT, THEY EXPECT TO BE COVERED IN TERMS OF BOTH THEIR CHILDREN’S
EDUCATION
 AND THEIR HEALTH EXPENDITURES.
ON THE OTHER HAND
, OTHERS THINK THAT
GOVERNMENTS
 CAN NOT AFFORD ALL OF TREATMENT AND
EDUCATION
 EXPENDITURES WHICH ARE EXCLUSIVELY EXPENSIVE AND
MOREOVER
 THEY SHOULD SPEND MORE MONEY ON THE DEVELOPMENT OF THE
COUNTRY
INSTEAD
 OF ON INDIVIDUALS’ NEEDS.
FOR INSTANCE
, SPENDING ON MONEY FOR THE IMPROVEMENT OF PUBLIC TRANSPORTATION SHOULD BE PREFERRED RATHER THAN THE TREATMENT OF PERIODONTAL DISEASE WHICH IS A PREVENTABLE GUM DISEASE AND MEANS WASTED USE OF SOURCES. IN
THIS
 WAY, THE
COUNTRY
 MAY BE MORE ATTRACTIVE TO TOURISTS AND THE NATION CAN BE BETTER IN TERMS OF FINANCIAL SITUATION. TO SUM UP,
ALTHOUGH
GOVERNMENTS
 HAVE RESPONSIBILITIES
SUCH
 AS PROVIDING NECESSARY SERVICES TO THEIR CITIZENS, IN MY VIEW, HEALTHCARE SYSTEMS AND
EDUCATION
 SHOULD NOT BE FREE. THE SOURCE SHOULD SPARE FOR THE IMPROVEMENT OF THE WHOLE NATION
INSTEAD
 OF INDIVIDUALISTIC NEEDS.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • universal healthcare
  • public education
  • taxpayer burden
  • financial stress
  • equal opportunity
  • workforce development
  • public health
  • literacy rates
  • tax revenue
  • government expenditure
  • inefficiency
  • long waiting times
  • accessibility
  • quality of education
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