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Some people think that it is necessary to use animals for testing medicines or other products intended for human use. Others, however, criticize this as animal cruelty. Discuss both of these views and give your own opinion.

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Nowadays, there are two views, one part of society has a belief we need to
use
 different creatures in order to find good solutions for technology in medicines or different types of products that we need to them for having a better
life
, while many people agree with
this
 topic other persons will be against with
this
 subject,
this
 essay will check both views and I express my idea about
this
 topic. People need to
use
 a wide range of creatures for reaching their aims, and these purposes can be for medicines or produce goods,
furthermore
, using
animals
 are known way of examining different drugs and products,
in addition
, if scientists do not want to
use
 them likely they can not reach to success in a short time,
for example
, community in the past faced many diseases in the past and they had to
use
 of
animals
 for overcoming to that illnesses,
otherwise
, they could not solve that and likely will continue until now and
this
 issue leads to increase mortality among human. There are many individuals who have a criticized
this
 subject,
however
, their criticize are almost true and they think scientists will be hurt
animals
 without any reason, nowadays, technology will
use
animals
 for human survival or for saving
animals
 and
this
 will lead to all of the creatures having a long
life
 in comparison to before,
for instance
, using a Mice for cure many patients and avoid of many suffers. In conclusion, I firmly believe that
this
 will help society for
having
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have
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 a long
life
also
 scientists do not want to annoy
animals
 without any reason as well as
this
 will lead to their welfare and we can have calm and we can prevent many sick in their
life
.
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