Some people think crimes are the result of circumstances like poverty and other social problems. Others believe that they are caused by people who are bad in nature. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Today, every country is facing
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many
problems
.
However
, many
people
feels
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that
problems
like
crime
are conclusions of poverty as well as social
problems
.While other thinks that they are the results of bad
people
in nature.Here,I would like to discuss both the views and tell you what
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think. It is undeniable that
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nowadays everything is becoming expensive and common
people
could not afford everything
that is
necessary for them. Some
people
feels
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that they are below
poverty
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the poverty
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line.
People
are unable to buy their daily basic needs. So in order to run their
houses
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they are getting indulge in the
crime
sections. They use to snatch the valuable ornaments from the
females
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female's
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neck, some
people
became
edicted
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addicted
to steal the expensive items from the homes
such
as things made of gold ,
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and silver
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,
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so that they could
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them in the market
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and
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an
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and
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get money in return. Many
people
are facing
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social
problems
like
people
who's
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daughters are being tolerated for the dowry and they are helpless for their
daughter
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. So, in order to make their
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daughter's
daugher's
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daughter's
life easy and free from the
husband
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family
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blames ,
people
do the snatching or do fraud
with
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the other
people
.
On the other hand
, a lot of
people
believes
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that
crime
is
also
caused due to the bad behaviour of the
people
in
the
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society. There are numerous
of
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people
who are not good
in
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their habits.They use to compel the others to
intimedate
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intimidate
them so as to create a seen in the society or show the
people
that are having a fight. There are
varities
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varieties
of
people
who are doing the higher jobs and they
takes
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the
advantages
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advantage
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of their positions by using them on the
people
.
For example
,
policeman
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sometimes
give
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challen
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challenge
to
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the
people
without any reason and leaves their known ones. In
such
case
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if a person complains , he or she is put to the
prission
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prison
without a reason. To sum up,
i
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want to tell the government that
people
who are doing
crime
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crimes
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or
people
who are reporting the
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against the criminals, should both be investigated. Criminals should be punished in the way that
people
who
thinks
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to
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invole
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involve
involved
in
the
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a
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crime
should think before doing the
crime
.
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