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The two maps illustrates the Southside shopping mall and its development plan.

The two maps illustrates the Southside shopping mall and its development plan.
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The two maps compare the present form of
Southside
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the Southside
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 shopping mall to its development plan.
Overall
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, the biggest change that can be observed is the size of the shopping mall. To facilitate the expansion of the building, the golf course and the park which are located on the east side of the building
,
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 will be removed. The other major change is the car park. It will be expanded towards the area where
fitness
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the fitness
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 centre is currently located. The increasing size of the shopping mall is to allow more spaces for shopping and
beauty
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a beauty
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area
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areas
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, which will be composed of a beauty salon, two shoe
stores
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, a cosmetic store, a gift shop and several fashion
stores
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. The addition of those new
stores
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 will
at
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be at
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 the expense of
play
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a play
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 area, noodle
shop
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shops
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 and cinemas.
While
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 several
stores
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 will be replaced, the supermarket and the toilet will stay the same. The department store will
also
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 remain
at
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on
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 the current side of the building, but it will be larger in size and it will have its own entrance. There will,
however
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, be nowhere to eat as the plan shows that the café will
also
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 be converted
to
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into
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 an information centre.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 86%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words stores with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
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