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in their advertising, business nowadays usually emphasise that their products are new in some way. why is this? Do you think it is a positive or negative development?

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Advertisement is the lifeline for a business to establish its new
products
 in the market. I would like to discuss the impact of advertising for the new product and simaltensouly pros and cons for the same. I strongly believe in the positive
development
 of advertising. Overall, marketing has evolved dramatically with technology in the present era and has made a way for introducing the new product to customers with various modern strategies. In the
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 we will discuss the negative points the same. For companies to survive the competition in the vast market they have to differentiate themselves from other competitors, as a
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 they want to expand their sales and profits. Organizations advertise their
products
 to create awareness among the target customers and by marketing their new developed
products
 to attract competition. Some businesses are spreading false information regarding the new changes made in their finished goods.
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 business, where the company is fooling customers about their new product and not delivering the right information to the public. To sum up, I feel the
development
 of advertising should be monitored closely by the government and have a re-investigation on various new
products
 marketed ,
furthermore
 advertising
development
 has outweighed the negative developments.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • novelty
  • excitement
  • latest trends
  • improvements
  • advancements
  • differentiating
  • competitors
  • innovation
  • progress
  • attracting attention
  • generating curiosity
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