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some cities create new housing for their growing population by constructing a smaller number of high-rise buildings. other cities create more of low-rise building. which solution is better. in your opinion?

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In order to tackle the problem of rapid population increase, the government has come out with two solutions; one is creating more high-rise
buildings
, and one is creating more
low-rise
buildings
. Both solutions have merits and demerits, and I prefer the
first
 solution. My reasons will be explained in the following paragraphs. Let's talk about the advantages of high-rise
buildings
first
.
First
, they use less public
space
.
Due to
 high-rise
buildings
' attributes, they don't require a large amount of
space
;
therefore
, more
space
 can be saved, and they can better control the population in a certain area. It's worth mentioning that high-rise
buildings
 are advantageous to the
city
's construction actually. Because they concentrate the population in a certain place, the government can build some infrastructure around these places,
such
 as bus stations and shopping malls.
As a result
, the
city
 will look more organized, and
space
 that has been saved can be used to build other basic infrastructure, like hospitals.
On the contrary
, high-rise
buildings
 have some demerits too.
For example
, they worsen global warming.
Due to
 their attributes, they are high and are covered by glasses. As we know, the sunlight can be absorbed and reflected by these glasses. And on account of their height, they can easily block the wind;
therefore
, there will be a perennial high temperature in the
city
. It's worth mentioning that because these high-rise
buildings
 can concentrate people together, the domestic appliances that are used by them produce heat.
Hence
, under the double whammy of a high temperature, these
buildings
 can deteriorate global warming to a large extent. Let's talk of
low-rise
buildings
 now.
First
, they require a large amount of
space
. Because they are
low-rise
;
in other words
, they can't offer dwelling places to many people.
Hence
, the government needs to build more
buildings
 to address
this
 issue.
As a result
 of having too many
low-rise
buildings
 in the
city
, they can ruin the
city
's structure and take away the places be belong to some infrastructure, like schools. In conclusion, I think building more high-rise
buildings
 is more reasonable.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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