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Research into new types of medicine and treatments are essential to improve health and deal with diseases. Who do you think should fund these researches : private companies, individuals or the government ?

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As a result
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 of advancements in technology over the
last
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 two decades, several innovative methods have been developed to increase the standards of health and combat various diseases. But the authority that should be in charge
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this
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research
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 has been a perennial subject of debate. In my opinion, to have a better outcome, the majority of the ownership has to be taken by the
government
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.
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, the equipment which is used in
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 form of
research
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 is very expensive.
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 financial status and the budget planned, it can be thoroughly examined to determine the funds allocated to
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research
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 department.
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, the money can be utilized in an efficient manner without any unnecessary expense.
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, in
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recent days, the number of scams and bankrupts
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 increasing especially in private
companies
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.
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 can be easily avoided under the supervision of
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government
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.
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, some
of
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the
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private
companies
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 should have
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access
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 their
research
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.
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, it enables the
government
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 authorities to reduce the pressure by distributing the work.
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, the production of medicines can be doubled, and the availability can be maximized
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 a faster rate.
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, in the initial stage of
COVID-2019
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the COVID-2019
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 pandemic, most of the vaccines were developed by
the
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private
companies
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 across many countries and distributed
among
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 the public.
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 has helped a lot of people to recover from the disease. To conclude, with proper monitoring and surveillance, both private
companies
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 and the
government
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 can go
hand-in-hand
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hand in hand
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 to efficiently conduct
research
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 and develop more medicines.
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