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Some people believe that a gap year between school and university is a good idea, while others disagree strongly. Consider both sides of this debate and present your own opinion. You should give reasons for your answer, and include ideas and examples from your own knowledge and experience.

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Introduction
In today's world, some people believe that taking a break between high
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 and
university
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 benefits
students
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,
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 others disagree with
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 view. I strongly agree with that opinion, because the
gap
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 between them is essential, and I will explain my choice thoroughly in
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 essay.
Body paragraph 1
A
gap
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 year between
school
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 and
university
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 can be a life-changing experience for
students
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. Many teenagers have not decided on their future career paths, and making
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 decision too quickly can have negative consequences for their future. Choosing a career path is one of the most essential and responsible decisions for
students
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, and I believe that they should be confident enough to choose it, because employees
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 who are not satisfied with their chosen jobs regret
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it all their lives.
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, they will not put all their energy and passion in the job which they do not like, because of which they will earn less money.
Body paragraph 2
On the other hand
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, some people believe that a
gap
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 year is simply a waste of time. They find the delay of universities unnecessary and only for entertainment purposes.
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, they argue that the knowledge and
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experience of high
school
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 may not be fresh enough for
university
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. I strongly disagree with that opinion. From my point of view, one year
gap
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 grants the right to rest to all deserving
students
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. They can travel, learn outside the classroom, devote more time to their hobbies and, most importantly, discover a career they are passionate about.
Conclusion
In conclusion, I strongly recommend every student to take
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 or even two-year
gap
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 between high
school
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 and
university
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 to explore the world, to spend more time with their family and friends, to decide what they want for their future and after that break to set goals and do their best to achieve them.

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Task response
You answer both sides and give your own view clearly. To make your answer stronger, explain more about why some students may not take a gap year. For example, they may lose study habits, have money problems, or find it hard to go back to study.
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Your main idea is clear: a gap year can help students choose the right job. Add one real or clear example. For instance, a student could work in a hospital for a year and then see if they truly want to study medicine.
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Be careful with very broad claims. Not every student needs one or two years away from study. You could say that a gap year is most useful when students have a clear plan for work, travel, or learning.
Coherence and cohesion
Your essay has a clear start, two main body parts, and an end. Each paragraph has a main point, so the reader can follow your ideas well.
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The second body paragraph starts with the other view, but it soon returns to your own view. First explain the other side fully, then give your reply in a new paragraph or in the last part of that paragraph.
Coherence and cohesion
Use linking words with care. You use words such as “Moreover”, “On the other hand”, and “Furthermore” well. Add simple links that show cause and result, such as “As a result” and “For this reason”.
Coherence and cohesion
Some sentences are long and hold many ideas. Split them into two shorter sentences so your meaning is easier to follow.
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You discuss both views and state your own opinion from the start. Your view stays the same throughout the essay.
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Your point about students using time away from school to find a job they enjoy is relevant and well linked to the topic.
Coherence and cohesion
The opening and ending are clear. The ending brings back your main reasons: rest, family, future plans, and goals.
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Your paragraphs are in a sensible order, and the reader can easily see the move from your main view to the view you disagree with.
Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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