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Some people believe that the use of animals for the purpose of experiments is cruel while others believe that it is necessary for the development of science. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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Nowadays, animal rights have much more important than any other. So most people believe that animal model study is cruel, or it is not necessary. To some ,extent I agree with
this
 topic my point of view is mentioned in the following paragraphs.
Firstly
, all animals have their own right to live on earth. But in certain ,circumstances public can forget about it and they use rabbits, rats or guinea pig's life for their own welfare, and survival of the fittest
that is
 the theory behind
this
.
On the other hand
, the sacrifice of humans because of life-threatening disease has much more important than animal life.
Moreover
, every science lab has an ethical committee and animal house.
furthermore
, the scientist completed their research and the ability of that drug was confirmed by using an animal those having similarities to people.
Secondly
, if an animal model study is used to prove that the invented pharmaceutical has no side effects on a person.
Then
 only WHO will give sanctions for the commercial production of that remedy. It has a great impact on the control of the disease.
For example
, in the pandemic Covid 19 outbreak, there were so many studies conducted on the invention of a good vaccine,
accordingly
 without the animal ,
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model we are not able to develop any medicine to cure disease conditions. In conclusion, all animals including humans have their own importance, remember one thing any animal is not a substitute for a human.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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