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Appearances are deceitful. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this?

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There is a belief that a
person
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's
look
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 can be deceitful. It is a belief that
i
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 agree with
,
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 because in my opinion, a
person
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's look does not mean anything
,
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 if we do not know
personality
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their personality
his personality
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 or feelings. On the one hand, some
people
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 can be seen
rough
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 and stiff while other
people
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 have seen
much
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as much
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 more polite and kind.
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, the look does not always show the truth,
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, sometimes at work executives can be strict and push others
to
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 hard
working
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.
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, others can think that these executives are not
people
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person
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people
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 which
it
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is not always true.
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This
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These
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 kinds of
people
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 can be more friendly in their social life but at
work
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 it can be hard to be friendly because of
the
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 business career.
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,
people
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 who look strong are not always the strongest
people
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 we know.
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, we can think that fathers are strong and they never fail or feel bad about anything but
this
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 is totally deceitful because every
person
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 can fail or feel bad about anything. I think some
people
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 are trying to seem different
what
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from what
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 they feel and live. Especially, if someone is not rich they try to
be seem
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 like a rich
person
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. In conclusion, in my
opinion
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,opinion
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people
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 must show their real feelings and lives to
the
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other
people
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.
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,
people
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 will not trust each other and it will cause bad relationships.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • misleading
  • deceitful
  • superficial
  • first impressions
  • judgmental
  • idealized
  • reflect
  • genuine
  • anecdotal evidence
  • critical thinking
  • conveying
  • authority
  • evaluate
  • counterpoint
  • substance
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