In many countries traditional food is being replaced by international fast food. Some claim that this has negative effect on both families and societies. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
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for example
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Indonesia
, there are international Use synonyms
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franchises like McDonald's, Domino Pizza, Pizza Hut, and Use synonyms
KFC
. All of them sell unhealthy cooking. Another reason is community begin to love other Use synonyms
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not because of the taste but solely because of trends and lifestyle. They think buying international Use synonyms
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later
time, they will close the shop because they can not afford to buy cooking materials. Correct article usage
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Furthermore
, the economy of Linking Words
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will decrease due to more people closed their businesses,
But, is eating international Use synonyms
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opened in some regions in Use synonyms
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. Use synonyms
KFC
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originated in the USA. Unnecessary verb
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KFC
franchise in Use synonyms
Indonesia
will keep a good relationship between Use synonyms
Indonesia
and USA.
in conclusion, I think replacing traditional Use synonyms
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with international fast Use synonyms
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give negative impacts on societies ,especially on people's health. Use synonyms
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sometimes it does has a good side.Linking Words
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite