In many countries traditional food is being replaced by international fast food. Some claim that this has negative effect on both families and societies. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
In recent years, the development of international relations between countries is rising up. Some
countries
interested to consume international Add a verb
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werecountries
cuisine
instead
of the traditional one. societies believe that this
condition brings bad
impact on their families and societies. I personally agree with Correct article usage
a bad
this
statement.
Many international restaurants opened in a country
are fast food
types. This
kind of meal is not good for people's health. for example
, in my country
, Indonesia
, there are international food
franchises like McDonald's, Domino Pizza, Pizza Hut, and KFC
. All of them sell unhealthy cooking. Another reason is community begin to love other country's
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countries'
food
not because of the taste but solely because of trends and lifestyle. They think buying international food
is cool than consuming their own made of meal
. If Add an article
the meal
a meal
this
phenomena
keeps continuing, it would make traditional restaurants become less popular. Change the determiner
phenomenon
In
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At
later
time, they will close the shop because they can not afford to buy cooking materials. Correct article usage
a later
Furthermore
, the economy of this
country
will decrease due to more people closed their businesses,
But, is eating international cuisine
always give bad effects on their country
? not necessarily true. In some cases, it gives a nice opportunity for a country
to maintain a good relationship with another country
by selling other countries' cuisine
. For example
, KFC
opened in some regions in Indonesia
. KFC
is
originated in the USA. Unnecessary verb
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Therefore
, opening a KFC
franchise in Indonesia
will keep a good relationship between Indonesia
and USA.
in conclusion, I think replacing traditional cuisine
with international fast food
give negative impacts on societies ,especially on people's health. Although
sometimes it does has a good side.Submitted by serlyayus on
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