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Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems, as well as practical problems To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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It is thought by some people that living in another country with another
language
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 can cause serious either social or practical
problems
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. I completely agree with
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 point of view because using a foreign
language
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 can lead to
problems
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 in society and practical
problems
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. Speaking a new
language
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 can cause serious social
problems
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 if you are living abroad. To survive in the new country you should communicate fluently in local languages for daily interaction with local residents. At the moment, if you feel fear of interacting with local people you go outside. As
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, many foreign people become socially isolated which can lead to social symptoms
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 as depression and anxiety.
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, difficulty in understanding the local
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 can affect practical
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,
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 as decreasing capabilities to get jobs. To apply to a company you should have
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language
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 proficiency, which can provide to having good teamwork because you should speak and read a foreign
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. For another reason, speaking with local residents is important to living conditions.
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, doing some simple tasks
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 as buying stuff in groceries or accessing to health system.
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, if you have limited speech with local residents can make you hard to survive in new countries. In conclusion, speaking a foreign
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 when living abroad is important to survive in another country. For one thing, difficulty in understanding the local accent can lead to social
problems
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,
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 as depression. For another, having limited speaking of a foreign
language
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 can affect the capabilities of living conditions.
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coherence cohesion
Strengthen the logical connections between ideas, particularly between paragraphs. Consider using more transitional phrases to enhance flow.
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Provide more specific examples to illustrate the points made, such as real-life scenarios or examples from particular countries.
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Ensure clarity by checking for grammatical inaccuracies and awkward phrasing. These can slightly affect comprehension.
coherence cohesion
The essay includes a clear introduction and conclusion, effectively framing the discussion.
task achievement
You've addressed the task effectively, acknowledging both social and practical problems associated with language barriers.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • linguistic proficiency
  • cross-cultural communication
  • miscommunication
  • social integration
  • linguistic alienation
  • cultural dissonance
  • language acquisition
  • communication breakdown
  • interpreter services
  • language courses
  • bilingualism
  • multilingualism
  • language barrier
  • effective communication
  • cultural assimilation
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