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Some people believe that eventually all jobs will be done by artificially inetligent robots. What is your opinion?

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The recent development of technology has threatened certain types of occupations.
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, some claim that in the near future almost all
jobs
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 will be invaded by these machines. In my opinion, of
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robots
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 will play a significant role in the future, but they will not take over the whole job market.
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 every machine or robot has been designed and developed by human minds. Yes, it is true that these artificial creatures can do a lot of things. But, someone needs to program with correct instructions in order for them to operate. No machine can
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 own decisions because they are not capable of thinking.
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, there will always be vacancies for
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 that need intelligence.
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, these devices should be designed by someone, always those tasks are done by human beings.
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, a robot can instruct to repair a car, yet it could not instruct to design a car. Because that needs a higher level of intelligence. Another common fact is that
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 cannot process empathy.
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, they would not be used as judges and doctors who need social skills.
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, certain categories of
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 will be taken over by these artificially intelligent machines. Most labour works do not need much
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brain power. Those
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 only needs to repeat some actions.
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, those types of
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 will be done by
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 in the future.
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, people should move away from
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 that only needs physical strength and
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 the
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require
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 skills. To sum up,
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 some
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 are taken over by
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, these electronic and mechanical devices will not be able to take over the occupations that need empathy and higher intelligence levels.
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