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People attend college or university for many different reasons (for example, new experiences, career preparation, increased knowledge). Why do you think people attend college or university? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

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Studies
plays
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 a significant role in everyone's lives and getting a chance to go to
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University
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 is an incredible thing to have. There are various
reasons
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people
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 want to go to
college
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, some go for higher education, some for better
career
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 preparation, some want to enhance knowledge and many more
reasons
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. As far as I am concerned, I think
people
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 attend
college
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 for their good
career
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 and for networking. I think
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 way for two
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, which I will explore in
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 essay. As an initial point, I believe that for a better
career
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 one must have a good educational qualification, which is possible only through education, which can be done by going to
college
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.
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, my
friend
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's
farther
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father
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have
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 their own
business
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, it's their family
business
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. My
friend
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 is
found
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fond
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 of studies,
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, he did his graduation and post-graduation
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from
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form
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from
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renowned
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a renowned
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University
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and
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apply
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with a scholarship. Now, because of his studies, he took his family
business
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 to new heights of success, and
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, they are expanding their
business
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 to an international level. Nowadays, my
friend
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 is the CEO of his company.
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,
University
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 played a significant role in making
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career
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my
friend
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.
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, in ,
college
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 we meet different types of
people
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, some of them are from different backgrounds and some
they
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apply
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are from the same background. In
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college
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,college
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 we learn and get a chance to interact with different types of
people
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.
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, when I was doing my post-graduation at
University
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, I met one of my classmates, who was from Spain. We both have different cultures and backgrounds and later on we become good friends. We have
lot
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 of things in common and we used to study together. Even, in our
friend
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's group, most of the
people
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 are from different countries, and we together enjoy
a
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ourselves a
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lot. In conclusion, I would like to say that,
people
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 attend
University
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 for their better
career
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 preparation and for networking.
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, I feel both
reasons
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 are prerequisites for a good life.

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