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Some people say that the best way to improve public health is by increasing the number of sports facilities. Others, howerver , say that this would have little effect on public health and that other measures are required. Discuss both view and give your own opinion.

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People
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 believe that development in
sports
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 equipment can be seen as progress in the
health
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 status of
people
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. Many,
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, believe that other parameters are necessary. The
sports
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 facilities cannot enhance our
health
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 alone. On the one hand, being healthy with sport has a positive correlation. Providing and making better equipment for
people
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 leads to an
increase
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 in the amount of population and their time allocated to
sports
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, and by increased access to various serviced
sports
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, more individuals attract to do more body activities.
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, each person like a unique field of practice. Covering all facilities they need, they encourage them to do any activities they want.
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, pushing
people
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 to do more exercise can be seen growing in
perecent
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per cent
 of individuals who do
sports
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, leading to a healthier population.
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, to have healthy public, some other parameters have existed that can grow the level of healthiness. Individuals can
increase
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 their
health
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 by a healthy diet, focusing on developing organized products based on natural materials and minerals, and trying to have a clean environment and weather.
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, by investing time and cost in culture-building, develop awareness about
health
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 and
health
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 in detail, and observe personal hygiene. So can be reached to the healthy public by consuming natural foods and drinks, trying to protect their environment, increasing knowledge about
health
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, and observing personal hygiene. In conclusion, both perspectives play a critical role in making good public
health
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.
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, only by an
increase
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 in
sports
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 equipment we cannot catch the aim, we should work on another field
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 as, have a healthy diet, weather and environment empty of pollution and
increase
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 our knowledge about the different face of hygiene, because, even if the
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 solution be implemented, while do not pay enough attention to other parameters, the
health
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 of public will be stabled.
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